Wednesday, October 24, 2018

MOMENT IN TIME

This is a moment in time from when my dad and I went fishing in mahia and i fell in This writing was a bit hard becuase i wrote it about three weeks after it happened
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  1. KōkāOctober 25, 2018 at 1:38 PM

    Hey Emmerson,
    This sounds like an adventure! I love the way you have used speech marks in the right place. Did you read this out loud to yourself to help you find where you could put other punctuation?
    You could also use the Hemingway App that you used at WBS to help you too!
    I can't wait to read more about what you're doing at Gis Int.

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